Re: Site Check, Please

by "Pamela Shorey" <palema(at)galaxyinternet.net>

Date:	Sat, 9 Mar 2002 13:53:45 -0500
To:	<hwg-critique(at)hwg.org>
References:	yahoo awebresource
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Tenley, you are right on the money about editing the bullets. I say he
should go farther and edit them down to no more than one line apiece.  This
can be accomplished by reducing a phrase like
"provides expertise to facilitate the creation of ..."  to  "helps build
..."


> Homepage Content
>
> I recommend DRASTICALLY clarifying the 4 bulleted statements.
>

Regards,
Pam Shorey

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