Can I get a Critique @ AlterWorld (Non-Comm)

by Jason Jones <adrock(at)>

 Date:  Mon, 10 Aug 1998 15:56:27 -0400
 To:  hwg-critique(at)
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AlterHouse BBS
I submitted this before and after some re-work I am ready for
more critiques..   so beat it up the best you can.. 
then goto the bbs.. or  use these direct links  - frames      - non frames

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