Re: Critique of Canoe Alaska Site

Hmm.. 

1) Main page loaded quickly, immediately a typo jumps out..
 "Summer in central Alaska is one of [Alaska's not Alaska] best kept
secrets."
"Long warm days are unequaled anywhere"
I would change to "The long, warm days here are unequaled anywhere."

2) The text at the bottom of the page needn't be centered. Try using a
table to get a more readable effect. In my browser, NN3.0, the last two
words of your sentences wrap around to the next line...
Here's a preference issue.. (I'm an English Major, I gotta be picky..)

"Since its inception, CanoeAlaska has provided formal canoe instruction to
more than one thousand students ans is the oldest canoe instruction
program in Alaska. Our specialty is wilderness canoe tripping. "

Change "ans" to and, and consider restructuring the last sentence like so:
"We specialize in wilderness canoe trips."

"All CanoeAlaskas guides have more than 10 years experience in wilderness"
CanoeAlaska's would be better, and more tha 10 years [OF] experience...

"customized to meet your needs ans desires on the river. "
We got the "ans" again, must be a common typo..

3) On the trips page, more typos in the middle paragraph, including
"call so we can discuss you options" should be your,
and "CanoeAlaska condicuts self.." should be conducts..
One needs good "skills" to go canoeing, not skill..

"We provide canoes, paddles, and lifejackets and other equipment.
All meals on the river are includedas well as shuttles for the 
road-to-road trips. Canoe instruction and natural history guides"
Take out the and before lifejackets, put a space between includedas, and
finish the sentence that starts with Canoe instruction.. it trails off
without a verb or object..

4) The beaver creek site starts halfway down the page.. was this
intentional? If you are going to link to it, don't put so much space
between the title and the text/pictures. I figured it out when I scrolled
down.. all of them do this except birch creek..

5) "Alaska Range, The Delta River" "The" need not be capitalized..

6) "Gulkana flows through montane spruce" Is that supposed to be Montana
spruce? I'm not sure...

7) "Forty Mile" - fablulous change to fabulous.. there's also a broken
link to an image.. can't see the second one..

8) Reservations Page - text looks odd going all the way across the page
here, especially with the small table..

The images are very beautiful, and the background is a nice touch. I
enjoyed your descriptions, but typos and grammar errors marred the
presentation. Get a spellchecker and/or grammar checker to find such
things..

:)
Lindsey Milton

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