Re: The Great Music Site

by bower(at)polarnet.com (Will)
Date:	Tue, 30 Dec 1997 15:16:55 -0900
To:	hwg-critique(at)hwg.org
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        Hey Bram,

Powermac 275mhz  64 meg RAM   24-bit 832x624  15" screen
33.6 dialup  NN 4.03, NN 3.01, IE 3.0

>I want to know everything about:
>-lay-out

        Good to excellent. The focus is on the content of the site, which
is the best possible thing you can do.

>-navigation

        Clicked on the "Q" letter button and got an empty page. If you
don't have any bands for a specific alphabetical page, maybe you could
eliminate the link on the main page, so that visitors aren't wasting
bandwidth and time skipping through empty pages. IE, clicking on the A, B,
and D buttons takes you to pages with content, but clicking on the C
button, which has no content, does nothing.

>-content

        The content is interesting and well organized. However, who is
writing this? If it's you, Bram, then I would suggest saying so on each
page, as well as displaying your music credentials/experience somewhere on
the site. If the content is coming from somewhere else, you should say
where.
        Coding is solid and validates cleanly. Good job. :)
        I would strongly suggest that you carefully edit your content for
spelling errors, grammar errors, and punctuation. For instance, the first
paragraph describing the "Breach" band reads like this "Pumping out some of
the hardest adrenaline fueled hardcore aggression around. Breach totally
stand out as the hardest Burning Heart act." I would suggest completing the
first sentence, adding a hyphen in between "adrenaline" and "fueled", and
adding an "s" to "stand" in the second sentence. The rest of the content
also has errors like the example above, and should be thoroughly revised,
IMHO.

        Overall, I like the layout and design of the site, particularly
since it places the reader's focus on the content, and not the design. Just
be careful with the grammar stuff, and you'll have a great site, Bram. Good
luck!

                                                                Will Bower


<SNIP>
>http://www.geocities.com/SunsetStrip/Alley/2811
>
>Please critique it this time, because last time I had no replies...
>
>Greatings,
>
>Bram Jekel (a.k.a. Quickboy)
>quickboy(at)geocities.com
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