Re: Site Check, Please
by "Pamela Shorey" <palema(at)galaxyinternet.net>
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Sat, 9 Mar 2002 13:53:45 -0500 |
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Tenley, you are right on the money about editing the bullets. I say he
should go farther and edit them down to no more than one line apiece. This
can be accomplished by reducing a phrase like
"provides expertise to facilitate the creation of ..." to "helps build
..."
> Homepage Content
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> I recommend DRASTICALLY clarifying the 4 bulleted statements.
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Regards,
Pam Shorey
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