Hi Rene,

The first thing I notice about the site is that there's a LOT of text.  I'm
never going to read that text.  You might get the first three sentences
read, but after that, I'm bailing.  I just don't understand what you're
selling and I'm not going to read through five paragraphs of text to find
out.  I actually did since I was critiquing, but I still don't really know
what you're selling. A possible solution is to come up with about 3
sentences or less that's the main idea, put the rest in an "about us"
section or something similar.  The Gallery is a little confusing, I don't
know what "Next Gallery" means, how about instead a list of links named
something that describe the particular gallery.

Mary

----- Original Message -----
From: "Rene & Will Perry" <wprm(at)mindspring.com>
To: <hwg-critique(at)hwg.org>
Sent: Monday, May 06, 2002 7:24 PM
Subject: Site for cririque - take 2


> Sorry, I think I sent my first post in HTML. So...
>
> I am submitting my site for critique as required by HTML2 class. Please
note
> that the background sound, prompts, and periods after the validation icons
> were required for the class, and would not remain in the published site.
>
> http://www.mindspring.com/~wprm/html2/index.html
>
> This site will be a commercial site, geared specifically toward interior
> designers.
> Thank you in advance,
> Rene' Perry
>
>
>

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