Re: http://www.efo.fi/~sdahlbac

by "Joanne Fate" <lafate(at)worldnet.att.net>

 Date:  Thu, 21 May 1998 00:35:51 -0400
 To:  "Simon Dahlbacka" <sdahlbac(at)efo.fi>,
<hwg-critique(at)hwg.org>
  todo: View Thread, Original
Hello Simon,

I think your page is pretty good, and your English is not too bad. 

There are a couple of things that I might consider changing and one
is the color red that you have chosen for your background - it is
very overwhelming and distracting. Have you considered using a 
color like the one you use in your "welcome to....page"? 

After you make the corrections to spelling and grammar that I have
seen a couple of people suggest, you may want to find an online
spell-checker, and grammar-checker if one exists, and try to give
the English a little more natural flow. (Or find a native English
speaker who writes well, and ask him/her to proofread it for you.)

I got an error - when I put my mouse over your back button:
Microsoft JScript runtime error
In frame: hadley
[Line: 16] 'back' is not an object

Really, all in all, a great beginning. Good luck.

Regards,
Joanne Fate
lafate(at)worldnet.att.net
http://web4.superb.net/mrsfate
http://www.angelfire.com/ma/mrsfate/
ICQ # 4668124

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> From: Simon Dahlbacka 
> Date: Monday, May 18, 1998 3:17 AM
> 
> Hi, I'd really appreciate if you'd give me feedback on my
homepage at
> http://www.efo.fi/~sdahlbac
> 
> Thanks!!
> 
> Simon
> 
> 
> 

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