Hi Holly,

>Could you please critique a business site for The Many Splendid Thing at,
>http://members.xoom.com/Splendid/

NN4.05 on NT4, 640x480 (mostly) and 1152x864

The first page is nice and simple and loaded up very quickly. It was
nicely laid out for 640x480 but went a little skew at the higher res. I
noticed that the text on the logo looked as though it had originally been
anti-aliased for a white bg and then pasted onto the rest of the logo.

Next page: On 1152x864 the bg is too narrow and the blue margin is
repeated. This wouldn't be too bad if the text didn't run all the way over
and onto the blue, becoming illegible. On 640x480 the banner was too wide
and overlapped the blue margin. The book is very pixelly and the grey drop
shadow could do with a bit of a blur to soften it.

I would reverse the mouseover and mouseoff images - if your mouse moves
over an image you want it to become more prominent, not less! Also the
Main image has the wrong alt text. I would Change Main to say Home. The
blue bar saying "The Many Splendid Thing Inc." should be the same grey as
the other bars, or the same blue as the margin. Remember that on older
browsers that don't support bg colours, the white text will be invisible.

I don't think it's necessary to say "Owner:" when the paragraph is headed
with "The Owners" - unnecessary repetition. Ditto Products. You should
also link Products to the relevant page (and the same with other
references to different parts of the site).

Products page: The photographs are too dark and do not show enough detail
to be interesting. Rather show a closeup of one of the doll's faces or
outfits, or a single brush with a few pots of paint. A professional
photographer might be a good idea, although you could probably tweak these
photos to an acceptable standard. The page also doesn't give a very good
idea of the product range and prices.

Therapy: I would call this Events or something similar. Therapy doesn't
come across well IMO.

Location: "beautiful seanerie"??? Get a spell-checker... The photo would
look better with border=0 or border=1 and it needs to be brightened up a
bit.

Hope this helps.

Lynnsey


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