Hi Lantz,

I have to confess that I am unfamiliar with Frontier, Userland and some of
the other Capitalised Words you refer to. But I went to take a look
anyway. Since I don't have much time I will just mention a few things that
could be improved on IMO.

1. On the first scroll of the first screen I can count 5 or 6 different
text colours. This is very confusing... what's a link? What isn't? (I have
link underlining turned off on my browser.)

2. The combination of TNR and Comic doesn't work too well.

3. Why have a link on the home page to the home page? It's annoying to
click on a link and have the same page reload.

4. You need to insert a space into "Hiddenunder".

5. Your intro text "zL - Lantz's Scriptible Web is a Web of Information
from Lantz Rowland served from a Xml-Rpc, Scriptible Web, sponsored by the
Creator of More." doesn't make much sense to me. Try to read it from the
point of view of an outsider, a 1st-time visitor, a non-Geek. What's a
Scriptable Web? What's a Xml-Rpc? The Creator of More? More what?

6. In some places your headings are smaller than the body copy below them.

7. I think you may have got a little carried away with your use of the
<hr> tag... if your use of font colours/faces/sizes were more consistent
you would not need the <hr> to show where one area begins and another
ends.

8. The "Stories" link is rather misleading - these don't look like stories
to me?

HTH

Lynnsey

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On 2000-01-29, at 11:10 PM, Lantz Rowland wrote: 

>Hi ,
>
>I would like to ask the List for thoughts, comments and suggestions 
>regarding a Personal Web I have sketched out on a Frontier Server.
>
>     <http://Lantz.EditThisPage.com>
>
>It is actually the first private Web I have ever had on the public side
of 
>my security walls. There is, I hope I have enough content in place for
you 
>to give me feedback on the tone, techniques and framework. One way to
find out.
>
>I got some time coming up were I'll get to focus on the Web and your 
>guidance now could help.
>
>My server access is past arms length, with UserLand playing the role of a

>IP. So while I know how to rewrite the macros and renderers in Frontier I

>have zero access. That has mostly been an interesting experiment by
itself.
>
>I guess I should warn, that I am have belonged to the content side of the

>debates since html+ and have zero use for JavaScript.
>
>Thanks,
>
>Lantz
>--
>   Lantz Rowland <lantz(at)aabysgallery.com>  PgpKey: 0x67E5DFA5
>   Think Different!    Think TerraFlops!
>   zL - Lantz's Scriptible Web <http://Lantz.EditThisPage.com/>
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