Hi Jami,


Not bad at all.  However (okay, this is what you came for - critique...) I
missed some things to make it perfect.

First there's the two graphics.  I always consider it important not to show
what you do it with, but what you try to reach.  In this way, the top
skyline graphic is okay, though a worldmap overlayed on it (stylish) would
make the 'available for everybody' clearer.  I certainly would get rid of
that keyboard.  Try to make a nice composition reflecting 'success' but
keeping it abstract (+ stylish + clear + colourful + fitting).  Try to get
rid of the flat top on the skyline graphic.

Second, there's the content.  I went to look for your references and found
the same everywhere.  The actual content didn't get a special treatment.
You just use plain text, no columns or lines/graphics to lighten it up a
bit.  It would make a big difference.

Choice of font is alright for me (verdana - tahoma - arial - sans serif is
great on screen to my opinion).

Technically, the image rollovers of the menu didn't preload.

I must say I also like your currect site's top, but the buttons and content
would need some work.

The content layout comment also goes for the second site.  I'd also try to
change the logo a bit so it shines out better on the dark green.


Good luck - it's a nice start.


- Kayjey -
www.fiatcoupe.net



> -----Oorspronkelijk bericht-----
> Van: owner-hwg-critique(at)hwg.org
> [mailto:owner-hwg-critique(at)hwg.org]Namens Jami Moore
> Verzonden: woensdag 2 januari 2002 10:58
> Aan: HWG Critique
> Onderwerp: Been Awhile
> 
> 
> Could you all please critique the following two sites:
> 
> http://www.jamisniche.com/Test/index.html  and
> http://www.jagadraken.com
> 
> The first is my personal site, the second a site for an 
> online game. Thanks
> and hope you all had a wonderful holiday.
> 
> 
> Jami
> http://www.jamisniche.com
> 
> 

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