I think you have some grammatical errors. 

"All jewellery are limited editions of 4, but every piece being handmade
and all stones being different (especially ammolite), every piece is
unique."

First even though jewellery means multiple pieces it still gets a single
tense verb. Then some of the other wording seems awkward. I think it
should either be jewellery "is available only in limited editions of 4"
or "sets (pieces, etc.) of jewellery are available only...". Then
something like "Also, please note that since each piece is handmade and
all stones are different (especially ammolite), each piece is unique." 

Another place: "She started designing around this gemstone which
luminous qualities rival the famous black opal for colour and fire."
Should be "which has (or possesses) luminous qualities that rival...".

Some kind of pricing information would be helpful and I would make the
contact info. more obvious on the pages where they view the detail. 

The copy you have underlined that isn't a link I find confusing. I think
most people expect copy with that appearance to be a link.

This is the picky part (okay, maybe it was all picky)- The collection
page is easy to read, but I think there may be some way to add a little
punch to the layout visually. It is almost too clean for such an
artistic product. Saying this I don't really have too many ideas for
you. I can't even say what it is that bothers me: the fonts, the line
spacing or the boxes. Maybe it is just me! I also think a nice graphic
of one of the stones or jewellery pieces would add some punch to the
home page. I think it needs a little color.

It is an organized clean site with a lot of information in it. Good job.

Lori
-----Original Message-----
From: owner-hwg-critique(at)hwg.org [mailto:owner-hwg-critique(at)hwg.org] On
Behalf Of Catherine Renoir
Sent: Monday, August 26, 2002 12:15 PM
To: hwg-critique(at)hwg.org
Subject: Please critique Renoir jewellery site


Hello,

Could you please critique my site at
http://www.renoirjewellery.com/class.  This site was createdc during the
HTML 2 class.  I look forward for your feedback.

Thank you,

Catherine Renoir
mailto:catherine(at)renoirinc.com
 

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