Thanks for your input. I would like the words to be less fuzzy too. This
is where I am having a hard time balancing image size and clarity. I
will try working with it in Photoshop some more. Do you think I can
afford for the image to load a little slower?

Unfortunately, the average age of someone with CF is much lower than 30.
30 is life expectancy. Half of people live past that age half don't. So
the average age to die (which sounds horrible) is 30. I will try to
think of a better way to word that though so it is more clear.

Thanks for your critique it was very helpful.

Lori

-----Original Message-----
From: grandane(at)grandane.com [mailto:grandane(at)grandane.com] 
Sent: Saturday, August 24, 2002 9:48 AM
To: hwg-critique(at)hwg.org
Cc: Steve Devoti
Subject: critique


Re: http://home.att.net/~cfdiagnosis/

Hello Lori,

I think the appearance of your site is attractive, clean and pleasant in
its presentation.

On the first page (just to be picky) I found the words in lower case
(links) which incidently make a nice frameword around the picture of the
child, to be fuzzy and unclear.  I don't particularly like the choice of
words used for the introduction...."If you found you way to this
web-site"...sounds kinda 'wishy,washy' (kind of shrugging your shoulders
casually). Feel the first few words of the second para more positive for
commencement of intro...ie.,"The purpose of this site is to help"......

On the second page (General Information) I think the text content needs
to be checked over, found words reversed and also words left out.  For
example in the third paragraph it appears the word 'age' has been
omitted giving an incorrect meaning i.e. "In 1995 the average survival
of someone with CF was nearly 30. "  _think_ this should be the 'average
age'.

I havn't thoroughly read all the info on this site.....on the "Common
Misconceptions" page, You have the red horizontal line near the top of
the page but don't have one at the bottom giving impression of
'unfinished' to the page, especially as all other pages have this red
horizontal line at the bottom of page.....placing the red line where it
currently is, I feel gives impression of ....."the end" whereas there is
a lot more reading to do on that page.

Think the design of this site has good continuity, is effective,
pleasing and uncluttered, enabling the text content to obtain its full
potential in helpful information.

Hope the above is useful.

IE 5.5
NT4.+
800x600

Pat Greenfield

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