RE: Critique, Please

Franz, I applaud your efforts to make this into a constructive thread.
Towards that end, our web needs a lot of work. Can you point me in the right
direction in terms of some standard commercial web sites which are well
designed and simple for a beginner like me to do in FrontPage 98? Articles
or online tutorials you feel are valid would be most appreciated as well.

Nelson
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-----Original Message-----
From: owner-hwg-critique(at)hwg.org [mailto:owner-hwg-critique(at)hwg.org]On
Behalf Of Franz Maruna
Sent: Wednesday, December 30, 1998 6:27 PM
To: killian(at)ilikethis.cz; Starr Wolf
Cc: HWG Critique
Subject: Re: Critique, Please



>
>WHY THIS SITE IS "GOD" AWFUL....
>
>1. The tacky clipart animations are obnoxious......etc



Yup. But that was pretty harsh.

Starr, here is some more constructive criticism ..

Loose 75% of that copy. It sucks. You seem to get confused on weather your
designing pages, helping people learn about the web or building some sort
of extrasensory experiments.

I think I see where you're trying to go with it, but for gods sake, get a
book on marketing/branding before you start fuming about <i>IMPACT</i>...

If you want to be a HTML grunt, put together a tight page with links to
what you've done and some cool code tricks. If you want to help businesses
get on the web, read some sites that are successful at doing that, then
write your copy.

On the testimonials page, give us links to the sites you made so we can see
them

loose the pricing plans altogether, they're not going to make a sale you
want for you.

loose the specific lists of things people might want on their site,
summarize some of them vaugely, use that list as a discussion starter when
your making the sale.

loose the dumb dog and the respective membership badges..

pump the hell out of that christian network you're in. make sure everyone
in your church knows you make websites, and you wont really need this
website yer working on...


good luck,
-Franz
http://www.e-trance.com

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